Saturday, October 24, 2009

55 fiction - Escape

He ran, blood pulsating in his veins. “No no no, I won’t go back to that hellhole!” The world was a blur. Muffled sounds of padded feet drew closer. They were at his ankles. A bolt of shooting pain as the canines dug into his spine and his body fell, limp.

A growl.

SNAP!

Darkness.











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18 comments:

Amandasaurus said...

Whoa. I've been meaning to try my hand at 55 fiction for a while now. Was that really 55 words? That's all you get? I tip my hat to you, sir, for telling a story in that small space!

One Sassy Girl said...

In 55 words, you made me cringe!

Shaunak said...

@ Amandasaurus

Yep, 55 words is all you get..guess that's where the fun is, telling a tale in so few words. That was my first attempt at it. Hope I did justice to it :)

Shaunak said...

@ One Sassy Girl

Thank you so much! I marvel at the power of words in weaving imagination into reality.
It was an honour making you cringe :)

divsi said...

:O:O:O:O gud one....scary gothic gruesomeee!!! lol but a lovely read!:)
cheerz!

Umesh Agarwal said...

amazing one...one of these is on d way on my blog as well ;)...keep writing :)

Thousif Raza said...

Cool but could have been better with a shocking ending...


Take care and keep writing..........

Insignia said...

Wow..nice!! Its a challenge to tell a tale in 55 words! Good job

ladytruth said...

Reminds me of Dean in Supernatural being dragged to hell by some hellhounds. Captivating

Deepika said...

:( y cant i write 55 fiction... It was good... how can people explain so well in less words...

IcE MaiDeN said...

Ok i have never written 55fiction and Im not even a fan of em'. This one was nice. But I prefer the longer stories :P

Cheers,
Annie.

Shaunak said...

@ Divsi

lol thanks!

Cheers!

Shaunak said...

@ Umesh

As I said, my umbrella's ready for the rain :D

Shaunak said...

@ Thousif Raja

Ah, I guess so. What that ending would have been, well, my guess is as good as yours :)

Cheers and hope see you around more often :)

Shaunak said...

@ Insignia

Give it a shot. You tell some fascinating tales yourself.

Shaunak said...

@ ladytruth

Whoa! Now that you mention it, it reads more exciting than what I'd imagined!
P.S. The world is full of Supernatural followers it seems. So many of my friends are crazy for it...well, including me, but I missed the last season completely :(

Shaunak said...

@ Deepika

Give it a shot. It's definitely worth it. And who knows, those 55 words may grow into a 55 chapter novel right before your eyes.

Shaunak said...

@ Ice Maiden

Hmm...try doing one yourself Annie, it's challenging but leaves a lot to the interpretation of the reader.
But personally, I agree with you wholeheartedly. I'm writing a piece of fiction myself...but pretty much at a block for a long time.